申请文书应避免华丽辞藻的过度使用
中美网美国留学 www.usaer.net 2015-06-30 编辑: usaedit1
写文书时,要注意不要过度使用华丽辞藻。太多的形容词和副词会毁了阅读体验。本文后面会建议如何使用强势动词,是动词,而不是形容词或副词,让文章变得生动。若文章中的每个句子都有两到三个形容词或副词,招生人员会马上觉得这是一个不成熟的写作,并且有太过讨好之疑。
如果动词用得好,大多数形容词和副词完全可以被删掉。对比一下: "The game was close. I won't receive credit for our win, but I did pass the ball to my teammate who scored the winning goal. He received the praise for kicking the ball into the narrow space between the goalie's hands and the upper corner of the goal post, but the victory was really about a team, not an individual."
修改后的版本表达非常顺畅流利,不拖泥带水。
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