这些留学PS写作开头方式不可取
中美网美国留学 www.usaer.net 2014-01-28 编辑: lily
虽然美国大学留学的录取结果是通过综合考量GPA、标准化考试成绩、以及课外活动等方面,但申请综合排名前50的大学,美国留学文书Essay始终是制胜环节。除了Common Application系统要求的两篇Essay保持不变以外,各学校的Essay题目历年都会有所变化。可无论怎么变,都无外乎几种主要类型。本文对一些常见Essay Topic进行了分类,并将每一类的写作思路和选材角度做了详细介绍。
随话说万事开头难,留学PS写作被越来越多的人所关注,很多人对于留学PS的开头不知道怎么写,从而胡乱的堆积一些没用的信息,这是不可取的。本文向大家总结了六种留学PS写作开头方式是不可取的,这样的PS非常容易导致被拒。
一、重复简历型
I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university
点评:美国留学个人陈述不要去重复简历中的东西,这在很多学校的PS要求中明确提到,个人陈述的写作要具体到事件上,事件解决上,而不要单纯重复已有的内容。
二、学校介绍型
I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.
点评:该同学的个人陈述开头等于是一个申请学校的简介,这好像是在帮助学校做宣传,或表达你有多了解该学校,而不是写个人陈述了。这是没有意义的开头,白白浪费了字数,最容易被秒据掉。
三、抄袭句式型
As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.
点评:Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 这种句式不知道是从哪里学到的,很多同学在用。但你要知道,老外最恨抄袭,最喜原创,所以利害关系大家想想吧。
四、救世主型
I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …
点评:一副救世主的形象,小时候就受富兰克林的影响,立志改变世界。个人陈述的写作一定要个人化具体化,别吹大牛,甚至带着一种霸权主义思维。
五、犹抱琵琶型
Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.
点评:重点放在自己要做重大决定上了,人生的转折点,然后来上句所谓名言警句。浪费字数,有限的字数里,同学们应该学会直接,并且抓住重点,突出自己最有优势的方面,最有特色的方面。
六、言幼稚型
'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.
点评:上来就回忆童年少年自己如何有着远大抱负,who cares。个人陈述字数有限,却用这么多话描述童年,没有任何意义。学校想知道你如何看待未来,而不是如何度过过去。
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